writing?

Hello internet!

    As some of you might know, I am an inspiring author. For those of you who didn't know, well... now you do :) And for those of you who don't care, well you can go die in a hole :) (I'm kidding of course.) Anyway, I wrote a little something and just wanted honest opinions on it. comment and let me know?
<3 the average teen

   I blinked, letting the cool wind pierce my skin like a cold dagger. It felt, real... good almost. I sighed, letting my head come to rest on the lime-coloured grass beneath me. Slowly, I reached out my hands, extending my fingers onto the dew-covered blades. Only one thought came to my mind as I twisted and yanked furiously at the weeds entwined between my fingertips; I could feel. 
    For as long as I could remember... I had been diseased. Not anything like the flu, or strep throat, or even cancer. Actually, to speak the truth, I would probably take all three of those combined over what I had had.  
    Familial Dysautonomia. 
    Too long had it been since I could feel it when someone brushed my cheek, held my hand, kissed my lips...The world was a cold prison, with only me being held captive by the malicious cage. I was alone, lost. 


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- average teen